Poetry on LoBD

A dream
You're under attack
But when you put yourself on paper
You don't see them anymore more
It's not you and your war
It's just you

You don't see the saw about to cut you in half
Like some sordid masochist magic trick
And you've lost sight of the devil on your shoulder
You can't see where the teethmarks lay red on your skin
You can't feel the attack
It's just you

Maybe it's life
Maybe it's something life needs
Maybe it's something God made for us all
Maybe we're meant to be punished
For all the ill we might do
Maybe it's not me
It's just you


Comments on "A dream"


StainedGlass Jun 21, 2010 12:08 pm

Love the first two stanzas, you are very good with spiffy flow of things. I like the last 3 lines in the last stanza as well, I don't really know why the beginning of the last stanza threw me off for a little bit...maybe it's the generalized life quotes I always hear and read...other than that I love it!

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