no ones around, no ones near, no one here to see my fear.
they all have run, thay all have gone, that is why i sing my song.
the blood of he, the sarrow of she, the young onenever more.
the night is bright, the moos delight.
people dance, people laugh, but they dont know the sorrow of the man.
they sing and dance, wile shields clash.
the sword droped, the hammer aroused, now mine enemies hit the ground.
fear my name and hide yor shame, for now is the time to rise.
and in the sun i am ....
alone
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the night is bright, the moos delight. (Moo's? HAHA do you mean Moon?)
Its a good poem but try using spell check. And um the Shift key.
its supost to be moon
That's what i thought but it was funny.
So if you want to fix your mistakes so no one else see's it. GO to poems and hit edit and you can fix it pretty easy.
[quote]the hammer aroused[/quote]
This poem is officially about erections.
mvu, only you could have seen that in any poem.
I saw it too...
Wow, perverts. Lol i sorta like the poem.
that's because you know nothing about poetry. please tell me in what ways the author succeeded here. this is the blandest rhyme scheme possible, half the words are misspelled, there is little continuity in the imagery, and the topic is extremely cliche.
You liked the poem? It was kinda hard to understand. I mean Yes I miss spell somethings sometimes. But I'm so OCD about it. If anyone tells me about it. I fix it so fast because I don't like looking like a dumb ass. I look over my work like 5 or 6 times before I post it. If I miss spelled something, I must have not really knew how to spell in in the 1st place.
And it bothers me so bad when someone points out a mistake in someones work and they don't fix it.
misspell*
LoL
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