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Ozian Love Triangle

Written by: Oakheart (View all entries)
Date: May 29, 2009 11:26 pm
Category: Love & Romance

Oakheart's notes about this work:

I'm very intrigued by reimaginings of The Wizard of Oz. This could be considered a indirect sequel to Scarecrow.

I like the meaning behind this quite a bit more than Scarecrow, but Scarecrow definitely has a better rhythm.

Ruby patchwork blue
Meets dusty metal gray

Legs unsteady
Shake and sway

No brain to keep the birds away

His missing heart
His unseen flaw

Jealousy hidden deep in straw


Comments on "Ozian Love Triangle"
nobodies_hero May 30, 2009 03:11 am

I liked this a lot. "No brain to keep the birds away" is a magnificent line.

Aderhold May 30, 2009 06:42 pm

[quote]His missing heart
His unseen flaw[/quote]

Favorite lines/stanza. Great job, man.

Emo-Hotpocket May 30, 2009 07:14 pm

its pretty good if you ask me...good job keep up the good work :D

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